Oo, what is going on I wonder. :o Can't wait to see!Constructive criticism I would offer: the action is a bit clunky to follow because the axis of action is crossed a couple times. If you're not sure what that is, basically it's keeping the "camera" on the same side of an interaction between characters from shot to shot, not crossing the invisible line/axis that runs between the characters. The rule is meant more for film, but it works for sequential art too. Following it keeps things easier to follow for the average viewer/reader, and the general rule is not to cross it unless you have a good reason or it's a stylistic choice.
No, you are right. I just forgot about that. A lot of film rules do apply to sequential art as well.